THE BUREAU OF HUMAN AFFAIRS / DEPARTMENT OF STORY

The Story
Doctor

DOCUMENTARYDIAGNOSISSTRUCTURE / EDIT / STORY

Your documentary isn't broken.
It's telling you where it hurts.

Direct, practical story intervention for documentary filmmakers, directors, producers and editors. No vague notes. No formula imposed on your film. We identify the actual problem, determine what the material can support, and build a path forward.

BOOK A CONFIDENTIAL 20-MINUTE CALL
COMMON SYMPTOMS
01

The opening isn't holding.

02

The middle keeps expanding.

03

The ending doesn't land.

04

Everyone thinks it's a different film.

SERVICES / PRICING

Choose the level of intervention the film requires.

SD–01 / ENTRY CONSULT

Story Diagnostic

$750

For a project that needs an expert outside perspective.

You provide the treatment, outline, pitch deck, assembly or work-in-progress. I identify the central storytelling problem and prescribe a clear path forward.

+Written materials + up to 45 minutes of footage
+90-minute private consultation
+Primary structural diagnosis
+Story engine + dramatic question
+Prioritized written prescription
+Recording of the consultation

BEST FOR — Development, early assemblies, stalled edits and filmmakers who need clarity before committing more time or money.

BOOK A STORY DIAGNOSTIC
SD–02 / FLAGSHIP

Rough Cut Intensive

$2,500

For a feature documentary that exists—but isn't working yet.

I review the cut as an editor, not a passive notes-giver. We examine structure, information release, character function, pacing, evidence and emotional architecture.

+Full review of one cut up to 120 minutes
+Project questionnaire + supporting materials
+Scene and sequence-level notes
+Custom structural map
+Two-hour working session
+Written revision blueprint
+45-minute follow-up consultation

BEST FOR — Feature rough cuts, festival submissions, network notes, difficult middles and films approaching picture lock.

DIAGNOSE MY ROUGH CUT
SD–03 / DEEP INTERVENTION

Edit Room Intervention

FROM $5,000

For a project that needs more than notes.

I join the film for a concentrated intervention and work directly with the director, producer or editor to rebuild the cut's architecture.

+Full cut + project-material review
+Diagnostic story map
+Sequence triage: keep, cut, combine, move or rebuild
+Information-release + character-function analysis
+Three private working sessions
+Two weeks of ongoing consultation
+Revised structural blueprint

BEST FOR — High-stakes revisions, conflicting stakeholder notes, major structural problems and approaching deadlines.

DISCUSS AN INTERVENTION
SD–04 / EARLY STAGE

Development Consultation

$500

For a documentary that hasn't been shot—or hasn't found its shape yet.

We pressure-test the idea before production costs make every decision heavier. The goal is to identify the film's engine and the evidence the eventual edit will require.

+Treatment, pitch deck or concept review
+75-minute consultation
+Central question + potential story engine
+Character and access assessment
+What to film next
+Concise development memo

BEST FOR — New projects, pitch preparation, access decisions and filmmakers planning their next production phase.

DEVELOP THE STORY
HOW IT WORKS
01

SEND THE CASE

Tell me where the project is, where it is stuck and what materials exist.

02

DIAGNOSIS

I examine the cut, evidence and underlying architecture—not merely its symptoms.

03

PRESCRIPTION

You leave with prioritized decisions and a practical path back into the work.

THE PRACTITIONER

Twenty years inside documentary stories.

Jon Connor is a Philadelphia-based documentary editor whose work has premiered at Cannes and appeared on HBO and Netflix. The Story Doctor distills two decades in the edit room into focused intervention: finding the film the material is already trying to become.

CANNES PREMIERE · HBO · NETFLIX · 20+ YEARS IN THE EDIT

THE FIRST CONSULTATION IS ABOUT FIT

Tell me where
the film hurts.

Twenty confidential minutes. No obligation. No hard sell. Your project and materials remain confidential.

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